Friday Fictioneers – 6 10 14 Rumah Adat – (Slight Return)

Friday Fictioneers Rules.

From the ever interesting http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/ comes… Friday Fictioneers.

The computer’s desktop had never resembled the desk it lay upon, so clutter free and clean was it that Yandi often wondered why she couldn’t make her humble Rumah Adat just as tidy. Silly virtual world she thought, lighting candles, as if the real world could ever resemble you. The laptop hummed gently, its picture of Kanagawa white in the semi darkness. There was a thump. The gate had slammed shut.

She looked out of the window, watching the wind and waves whipping along the shoreline. One wave in particular, looked terrifying.

“Hmm. Looks just like the-“

 

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16 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – 6 10 14 Rumah Adat – (Slight Return)

  1. I found this very atmospheric, the clutter free desktop and the single sound of the gate closing felt like the extreme calm experienced before a storm. I think the ending might be a shade too subtle, though, I guessed tsunami but wasn’t sure. I realise now that the sentence ends with the word ‘picture’, but it wasn’t the first thing that crossed my mind.

  2. Kingsley, Good story and I guessed at the final ending. Her last thought ended about then. It’s with good reason it’s called “the calm before the storm.” Well written. 🙂 —Susan

  3. Dear Kingsley, Such a good story of doom! There is a movie that came out a few years ago about a scientist (father) and his daughter who knew that there was an impending collision with a meteor and the father had his arm around his daughter as the tsunami was coming toward them. Gosh, it still gives me chills thinking of it but thank God we don’t know the future for if we did, we would never be happy. Very well written story – scary! Thanks, Nan 🙂

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