Challenge Instructions
Each Monday at 10:00 AM Eastern Time, a one-word prompt will be posted on our home page. The chosen word will come from the Merriam Webster’s Online Dictionary. For the Trifecta Writing Challenge, we will always use the THIRD given definition. Please note the definition—we’re likely asking you to use the word in a different way than you typically do.
You should write a creative response using the given word. You must use the word, in its correct form, in your response. Your response can be no fewer than 33 and no more than 333 words.
rain (transitive verb)
1: to pour down
2: to give or administer abundantly <rained blows on his head>
Humiliation can take many forms, and when you are 37, it doesn’t matter the form, only the intent.
Words keyed onto the side of your car; comments as you walk down the road; things your children say behind your back when you pick them up: it makes no difference what the shame looks like, because humiliation will burn red in your face, livid like a scar and you will forever dread seeing people again, because it is people who have made you feel like this.
One night, one evening is all it took. One drunken comment to a parent, one stupid, stupid slow dance with her husband, and the pleasant scene at the school gates could never be the same again, even though no lines were crossed, just the ones in communication that were severed…
That morning replays again and again, every time you pull away on the school run. Each gear change a step up in heart rate, a bile inducing shift closer to more ridicule, more staring, more comments.
You feel the money rain down on you once more, slapped into your face with taunts and screams enough to raise the dead. Oh God, how many people were standing there? How many saw? How many knew?!
Little Evie and and Geraint staring at the money that laughs on the floor at their mother, showing how much she was worth, how cheap she was, all the while wondering who the noisy woman was and why she was annoyed with Mummy…
School gates can be a nightmare!
Very good moment caught, and well-described.
Thank you. It’s a glimpse I think of a much bigger picture that has yet to develop…
PS….http://yourligo.weebly.com/haibun.html if you’d like to …!
Thank you- been trying to find it today as it seems to have vanished!
So sorry, trying to reorganise for the long term, we have it on another site too, just want to make it better.
You were drawn in Special Mentions in Dispatches last week, we just cannot decide who is ‘in front’, just it a draw I think. Your piece was beautiful. Will link back to you.
Thank you, I’ll keep an eye out for the link – dashed off a piece last night for you btw. Hope it’s ok!
Will go there – your last piece was wonderful, I’m sure this one will be more than ok!
There are two sites doing the haibun now, one on wordpress, will give details shortly.
Wow.
Thank you! Your comment got spam filtered for some reason – beats me, so apologies for not approving it sooner!
Terrific writing.
Thank you! I’m trying to develop my own style and voice – hard work, isn’t it?!
It is hard. I am still trying that as well!
Oh my, I felt her humiliation. Nicely captured.
That’s a great compliment, thank you. That feeling never goes away sometimes for people, no matter the age…
The humiliation feels so real, I was remembering humiliating moments in my life >__< I guess that shows the power of your writing!
Thank you – sorry to provoke a ‘flashback!’ I want my writing to engage people and let them feel. Your comment is very kind!
Schoolyard humiliation is the pits, when you’re 10, 15 or 35! *shivering*
It’s vicious and stays with you. Shudder!
Humiliation never gets easy to handle. I could feel hers in this piece- I hoped there was a way she could go somewhere else for a fresh start.
I hope so too – one simple mistake / innocent innuendo and a person’s world can turn upside down. How fragile are we all?
I like this it a lot, and how it improves by writing it in second person. Make you really feel the humaliation (despite the fact I’m a man)
Thank you! Perspective in writing alters the feel of a piece like crazy, and when it comes to emotional content it’s vital!
I agree with Bjorn on the use of second person – great idea and it worked perfectly. Also the specifics of the situation, the setup, was perfect to make the reader feel it too. Nicely done!
Thank you – I’m kind of new to all this, so it’s great to read others’ works and receive comments.
We’ve all felt it at one point or another, maybe not from this type of ‘rain’ but I imagine it stings just the same. Great job bringing us there. Thanks for linking up this week. I hope to see you around often!
Thank you – I’m looking forward to making the time to do this more!
It stings like a bee. Wonderfully written 🙂
Thank you. 🙂 This is a new way of working for me, so I’m looking forward to trying it out some more.
you pegged it well from a mom’s perspective – that her greatest humiliation would be concerning her children being involved
I see playground / school interactions everyday (I teach!) and the way all Mums care / worry for their children is amazing!
I like the quote, “dread seeing people again because people made you feel humiliated.”
Thank you; I love lines that have that whole ‘Shakespearean’ wordplay element – not that I’m in that league by any means!